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Old 2003-12-18, 02:05 AM   #1
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Here's a story I wrote... lemme know what ya think!
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Old 2003-12-18, 02:35 PM   #2
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I will read this, give me a day or two.
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Old 2003-12-18, 11:12 PM   #3
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I will read this, give me a day or two.
Don't hurt yourself... it's a whopping 7 pages long!
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Old 2003-12-19, 01:15 AM   #4
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Cool, I liked the story. Writing is awesome. I always looked forward to english classes where creative writing was invloved. I mean Economics is boring enough without having to write a freakin 10pg essay on the effects of currency exchange in China(That's an example I never wrote a paper on currency exchange in China I mean who the fuck cares about that, really).



The person who's estate a time traveler would get would be worth a lot because it is property? Or would the estate be like stocks and bonds and cash that matured to worth more? I don't think you can leave beneficiary money, stocks or bonds in a will(or life insurance policies right. Art?). I think you have to make choices as to who gets what, can you really leave an opened ended will? For stocks I think you have to change the beneficiary with the firm you bought the stock from. I don't think a will can act as a long term bank account, but maybe it can. Also, I felt the main character in the story to be a bit distant which is cool because he from the future?, but I dont know I always want a strong sense of a main character in a story, this is more of a longer story kind of thing though. Because this is a short story you cannot develop the character a lot, in lieu of backstory. I was eager to read the whole time, the story has good pace. I was thinking as a serious change to the story what if it happened at a bus station or Airport! For some reason I pictured that bar Stingers we went to that night as the setting for the story.

keeping writing Scott! I'll read it all.
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Old 2003-12-19, 09:37 AM   #5
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the only problem about the money thing is that it would be takin by lawyers and the banks plus uncle sam in 200 years there would be nothing left but it is a good short story i like it.....just have to think probability when it comes to the money thing Tyson but then again i cant time travel so its easy to look past
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